Very powerful little story with different meanings that sound alike. You worked them in as a thought and at the same time your descriptive words held me to the story. It told it all./joeparent(eye) voted.
I like this a lot. I'm not sure if I get the significance of the spelling thing? Where you put alternate spellings in parenthesis - I'd need that explained to me. But other than that, your writing style is fantastic - simple and elegant. The frank way the story depicts such a messed up situation creates a nice shocking effect that kept me curious.
I'd almost advise against broadcasting that it was going to be a Munchausen... Show more
What an honest account of a topic so often swept under the rug. One cannot help but appreciate the raw emotions of the characters involved. Beautifully written.
Hi Lara,
1st - quick note, rules and regs for 'Family Stories' contest says you need a front cover, I'm sure. It would be awful if they disqualified on that basis. :)
I read your story. Your beginning was thought provoking and I loved the play on words throughout. You maintained tense throughout, your pace was steady and your tone consistent. You did so well in 'showing' your story, not just 'telling'.
I also liked the way you... Show more
