Hi Perry,
Very interesting premise. I like it!
The first sentence hooked me, like it should.
You gave the dog a flaw,(being vegetarian), another good hook.
Yup, I think you've got a keeper:)
Aside from editing and finishing up, I think it should do well.
Thanks for the read,
Lee:)
I get the feeling there is more to this story. I like post apocalyptic tales. Here's a few tips to help you.
Nine years is a long time. Stuff left in a grocery store will have rotted or been eaten by rodents, except canned stuff, and most of those will probably have exploded.
Does Jack have a plan or a destination? Putting that in will drive you plot more. And, another good plot point, the relationship between Jack and Riley.... Show more
Dear robastor,
Yea my grammar is wack, thats because i speak dutch english and afrikaans.
I know, post apocalyptic story's are cool. they inspire people to adventuristic toughts. I could use a spelling check in my book, maybe you want to team up ? anyway what considers... Show more
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